Coffee Break Episode 1 (Part 2 of 4)

Triple Shot Productions presents:

COFFEE BREAK Episode 1 Part 2 -
A New Comedy Web Series.

Neal and David are two writers struggling to make it in the biz.  They watch their friend Phil’s theatre monologue.

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“I’d rather watch douchebag Dave clean his own pipe.”

This is exactly how the audience feels during the opening scene when Dave and Neal’s actor friend drones on in a theatre monologue, playing… yup, chickenpox.

Like a lot of scenes in this series so far; things could be lot funnier if they were shorter.  Timing is everything in comedy.  Get in, make the audience laugh, then get out.

Instead, we find ourselves asking, along with Dave and Neal at the 3 ½ minute mark: “What is this about?”

Indeed, what is this series about?

This episode introduces a Starbucks-y waitress/barista who trades lattes for writing help from the guys—in a very male nerd fantasy kind of way.  Think Rachel in “Friends.”  But less perky.  This could add an interesting love interest tension to the all-guys dynamic.

Also, for the first time, we get a sense of their goals as they brainstorm how to make money.  Yes, stakes!  Could this be a hint of things to come?  How do you pursue your dreams and make a living at the same time?  If so, that’s a powerful premise that many young people can aspire and relate to—if that’s where the series is headed.

Despite its length, there are some good and funny moments if you stick it through to the end.  But the highlight has to be the boy band music video spoof.  It’s pretty ridiculous, and will have you yearning for the good old days of ‘N Sync and The Backstreet Boys—or not.  Probably not.

There’s a lot of comedic potential in this series, and the two leads have a nice, subtle comedic chemistry.  If they can define what they want to say with this series, as well as hone that comedic timing, this could very well be the kind of diversion you’re looking for on your coffee break!